Dragonweyr Station

I'd prefer to see him aged up to at least 18 and perhaps say that he reached journeyman at 15 or 16, as even that is fairly young to reach that rank and skill level. You could say he was considered a senior apprentice by 13 instead. There seem to be quite a lot of the 'young genius' type characters ...

I like her! I would like to see a smidge more detail in the history section, but that is mostly to satisfy my own curiosity. XD

I still would like to see something for her dreams and ambitions section other than "be a gold rider," or at the very least something there about WHY she wants to be a gold rider and maybe weyrwoman. Also the statement that "all girls want to be goldriders" bothers me, since such...

I'd just like some other options to at least consider. Such as constellation names, or names based on space stuff, or weather phenomenon based names. It's easier to like the names picked if other options are shown and you get the chance to have a say.

I approve, nicely done with the history and changes.

Name - Mitaki Gender - Female DOB - ??? Age - ??? Location- ??? Personality - While both Mitaki and her 'twin' Motaki tend to give off a bit of a creepy vibe, Mitaki is the more obviously eerie of the two. She has a fascination with ghosts, to the point of claiming to have heard and seen them hersel...

Name - Motaki Gender - Male DOB - ??? Age - ??? Location- ??? Personality - Motaki is the quieter shadow of his 'twin' Mitaki. He doesn't talk much to anyone except Mitaki in fact. If she isn't within reach, he tends not to speak at all if he can help it. He loves working with his hands and is quite...

Name – Cesario "Kit" Kitello Gender - Male DOB – 3/10 Age - 27 Location – Dragonhold Station Personality - The first thing to know is that he absolutely loathes his real name. He uses his nickname “Kit” with everyone, so almost no one but his parents (and the government records) know his r...

I would like to see a bit more detail in his personality section. Also not necessarily sure about the mute by choice thing. It feels a little "special snowflake" to me. It could possibly be fine if played out well, but it usually comes off as a way to give your character a "disability...

She has a couple spelling/grammar errors in the history section. "she had a offinity for sewing" for example, should be affinity. Just being a little nitpicky here. She's a good character I think. Give her one more proofreading to tidy those up and I approve.